Evaluation of rough cut 2 (based on the feedback)

When we showed the class our rough cut 2 it was clear that our sequence has improved a lot from the first one as we have re shot scenes to make everything match e.g the burning picture scene. Also the voice over we put in allows the audience to connect with the sequence emotionally, as it explains to them the background story that wouldn't have been able to be explained through dialogue. We have also now added in sound that plays in the background of the dialogue this was so the audience's attention was never detached from what is going on.

However for improvement we need to have different sounds for our ident and distribution company which we will do in the editing process. Also the sound we are using needs to be quite because it could be difficult for the audience to be hearing the dialogue and voice over. Now we are just putting in our tittle credits and adjusting the sequence for the final version.
As well as this we were advised put a time on the name of our title as 'years later' seemed too vague.